Wednesday, 30 October 2013

The vet

The people are waiting in the waiting, for the man to call them in with their pets. The lady has an grey cat. Poor cat has a broken leg. The cats owner has blond curly hair, and a green dress They are sitting on a green couch.

By Ella
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  1. Anonymous30 October 2013 at 20:10

    Wow Ella I really like your story but maybe you need to work on your joining words, by Samaya

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    1. Room 9 Sumner 201230 October 2013 at 20:11

      Lovely comment Samaya. I like how you have given Ella some feedback on how she could improve her writing. What joining words could she use?
      Miss D

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  2. Miss Crampton Team 5SC31 October 2013 at 23:25

    What great sentences Ella. I like the way you have used lots of adjectives to describe the different characters!

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