Wednesday 30 October 2013

The vet

The people are waiting in the waiting, for the man to call them in with their pets. The lady has an grey cat. Poor cat has a broken leg. The cats owner has blond curly hair, and a green dress They are sitting on a green couch.

By Ella
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  1. Anonymous30 October 2013 at 20:10

    Wow Ella I really like your story but maybe you need to work on your joining words, by Samaya

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    1. Room 9 Sumner 201230 October 2013 at 20:11

      Lovely comment Samaya. I like how you have given Ella some feedback on how she could improve her writing. What joining words could she use?
      Miss D

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  2. Miss Crampton Team 5SC31 October 2013 at 23:25

    What great sentences Ella. I like the way you have used lots of adjectives to describe the different characters!

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